Category: Writers Block
By tree and leaf,
By root and branch,
Long years uncounted,
Through warmth of sun,
Through chill of snow,
Long we here have dwelt.
In the brilliance of autumn,
In the newness of spring,
We have endured.
Through the mortal wars,
Through magic’s grace,
We have stood unbroken.
Fly the wind and hear the music,
Run the field and feel the strength,
Fear ye not the shadows of night,
Dance the stars and play under moon glow,
Young bird, fly you swift and free,
Cool wind bend the branch,
Burning sun sear the leaf,
Bitter cold freeze the blood,
Yet it is we who remember all the world,
Dig roots deep in cool earth,
Find the water and endure the weather,
Break not under storm or wind,
Break not under mortal hand,
Dark waters cold find the sea,
Spirit lost return to me.
Nice one! I really like it.
Thank you for reading.
I really like your style of writing--the way your poems are worded. What I don't like about the poetry you've posted is that there is no or little emotion in it. Also, your poems don't vary in category and because of the way you describe them, they all almost seem to be about the same thing.
I have to agree with Raven. I don't see a lot of emotion in this. Not a lot is expressed. You touch on a lot of emotion, beuay, mystery, memory; a lot of themes that you could do more detail on, but you move on. I wonder if you are trying to be vague about it on purpose, or if that is your writing style in itself.
Thanks for the coments. I'll try to do better next time.
War will always be my favorite, but this one is a close second. Whimsical. It has a very Irish feel to me. I expect penny whistles and liars and roughly made little wooden drums being beaten by plump little dwarves while the nymphs dance around a moonlit clearing. well penned.
Chinchillac,
I think you have a nice feel for this type of fantastical poetry. Your diction is good, and you envoke a good sense of what you write of. I must somewhat agree with a few of the posts however who said that your poem lacks depth of feeling, though, that being said, I could see it as an opening of a fantasy story (See the Dragonlance, Demon Wars Saga or others for examples). My only main concern with this poem is some of the lines possess too many syllabols which tends to disrupt the flow just a tiny b it. If you try reading it out loud you might see what I mean. Good job overall.
Guardian